Thursday, April 25, 2013

Work Cited

Work Cited

Gannon,, Megan. "Science News – Science Articles and Current Events | LiveScience."LiveScience.com. N.p., 26 July 2012. Web. 25 Apr. 2013.

Meyer, Stephenie. Twilight. New York: Little, Brown and, 2005. Print.

Snicket, Lemony, and Brett Helquist. A Series of Unfortunate Events: The Bad Beginning. New York: HarperCollins, 1999. Print.

Williams, William C. "Letters from Archibald MacLeish." Poetry Foundation. N.p., 1938. Web. 25 Apr. 2013.

"Why People Should Read for Pleasure." Advanced Composition for Non-Native Speakers of English. N.p., n.d. Web. 25 Apr. 2013.

"Why People Shouldn't Watch Too Much Television." Advanced Composition for Non-Native Speakers of English. N.p., n.d. Web. 25 Apr. 2013.

Imitation of Death of a Salesman

Death of a Salesman
Arthur Miller

(The knocking is heard again. He takes a few steps away from
her, and she vanishes into the wing. The light follows him, and
now he is facing Young Biff, who carries a suitcase. Biff steps toward him. The music is gone.)
BIFF: Why didn’t you answer?
WILLY: Biff! What are you doing in Boston?
BIFF: Why didn’t you answer? I’ve been knocking for five minutes, I called you on the phone...
WILLY: I just heard you. I was in the bathroom and had the door
shut. Did anything happen home?
BIFF: Dad — I let you down.
WILLY: What do you mean?
BIFF: Dad...
WILLY: Biffo, what’s this about? (Putting his arm around Biff.)
Come on, let’s go downstairs and get you a malted.
BIFF: Dad, I flunked math.
WILLY: Not for the term?
BIFF: The term. I haven’t got enough credits to graduate.
WILLY: You mean to say Bernard wouldn’t give you the answers?
BIFF: He did, he tried, but I only got a sixty-one.
WILLY: And they wouldn’t give you four points?
BIFF: Birnbaum refused absolutely. I begged him, Pop, but he
won’t give me those points. You gotta talk to him before they
close the school. Because if he saw the kind of man you are,
and you just talked to him in your way, I’m sure he’d come
through for me. The class came right before practice, see, and I
didn’t go enough. Would you talk to him? He’d like you, Pop.
You know the way you could talk.
WILLY: You’re on. We’ll drive right back.
BIFF: Oh, Dad, good work! I’m sure he’ll change it for you!
WILLY: Go downstairs and tell the clerk I’m checkin’ out. Go
right down.
BIFF: Yes, sir! See, the reason he hates me, Pop — one day he was
late for class so I got up at the blackboard and imitated him. I
crossed my eyes and talked with a lithp.
WILLY (laughing): You did? The kids like it?
BIFF: They nearly died laughing!
WILLY: Yeah? What’d you do?
BIFF: The thquare root of thixthy twee is... (Willy bursts out
laughing; Biff joins him.) And in the middle of it he walked in!
(Willy laughs and The Woman joins in offstage.)
WILLY (without hesitation): Hurry downstairs and...
BIFF: Somebody in there?
WILLY: No, that was next door. (The Woman laughs offstage.)
BIFF: Somebody got in your bathroom!
WILLY: No, it’s the next room, there’s a party —
THE WOMAN (enters, laughing; she lisps this): Can I come in?
There’s something in the bathtub, Willy, and it’s moving!
(Willy looks at Biff, who is staring open-mouthed and horrified
at The Woman.)
WILLY: Ah — you better go back to your room. They must be
finished painting by now. They’re painting her room so I let
her take a shower here. Go back, go back... (He pushes her.)
THE WOMAN (resisting): But I’ve got to get dressed, Willy, I
can’t —
WILLY: Get out of here! Go back, go back... (Suddenly striding for
the ordinary.) This is Miss Francis, Biff, she’s a buyer. They’re
painting her room. Go back, Miss Francis, go back...
THE WOMAN:But my clothes, I can’t go out naked in the hall!
WILLY (pushing her offstage): Get outa here! Go back, go back!(Biff slowly sits down on his suitcase as the argument continues
offstage.)
THE WOMAN: Where’s my stockings? You promised me stockings, Willy!
WILLY:I have no stockings here!
THE WOMAN: You had two boxes of size nine sheers for me, and
I want them!
WILLY: Here, for God’s sake, will you get outa here!
THE WOMAN (enters holding a box of stockings): I just hope
there’s nobody in the hall. That’s all I hope. (To Biff.) Are you
football or baseball?
BIFF: Football
THE WOMAN (angry, humiliated): That’s me too. G’night. (She
snatches her clothes from Willy, and walks out.)
WILLY (after a pause): Well, better get going. I want to get to the
school first thing in the morning. Get my suits out of the
closet. I’ll get my valise. (Biff doesn’t move.) What’s the matter!
(Biff remains motionless, tears falling.) She’s a buyer. Buys for
J. H. Simmons. She lives down the hall — they’re painting.
You don’t imagine — (He breaks off. After a pause.) Now listen,
pal, she’s just a buyer. She sees merchandise in her room and
they have to keep it looking just so... (Pause. Assuming command.) All right, get my suits. (Biff doesn’t move.) Now stop
crying and do as I say. I gave you an order. Biff, I gave you an
order! Is that what you do when I give you an order? How dare
you cry! (Putting his arm around Biff.) Now look, Biff, when
you grow up you’ll understand about these things. You mustn’t
— you mustn’t overemphasize a thing like this. I’ll see Birnbaum first thing in the morning.
BIFF: Never mind.
WILLY (getting down beside Biff): Never mind! He’s going to give
you those points. I’ll see to it.
BIFF: He wouldn’t listen to you.
WILLY: He certainly will listen to me. You need those points for
the U. of Virginia.
BIFF:I’m not going there.
WILLY: Heh? If I can’t get him to change that mark you’ll make
it up in summer school. You’ve got all summer to —
BIFF (his weeping breaking from him): Dad...
WILLY (infected by it): Oh, my boy...
BIFF: Dad...
WILLY: She’s nothing to me, Biff. I was lonely, I was terrible
lonely.
BIFF: You — you gave her Mama’s stockings! (His tears break
through and he rises to go.)
WILLY (grabbing for Biff):I gave you an order!
BIFF: Don’t touch me, you — liar!
WILLY: Apologize for that!
BIFF: You fake! You phony little fake! You fake! (Overcome, he
turns quickly and weeping fully goes out with his suitcase.
Willy is left on the floor on his knees.)
WILLY:I gave you an order! Biff, come back here or I’ll beat you!
Come back here! I’ll whip you!
(Stanley comes quickly in from the right and stands in front of
Willy.)
WILLY (shouts at Stanley):I gave you an order...

Hammil:

Death of a Salesman
(The knocking is heard again. He takes a few steps away from her, and she vanishes into the wing. The light follows him, and now he is facing Young Biff, who carries a suitcase. Biff steps towards him. The music is gone. )
Biff: Hey dad!
Willy: Biff! I’m glad you could make it! How was your trip?
Biff: It was great. The car ride took a lot longer than I thought. There was a lot of traffic near the Boston area.
Willy: Well I’m glad you made it son. I have something very important to tell you.
Biff: What is it dad?
Willy: Angela and I are getting married.
Biff: Dad that is great! How did you ask her?
Willy: I took her to her favorite Italian restaurant, La Bella Luna and we had a romantic evening of pasta and her favorite Merlot red wine. We spent hours at the restaurant enjoying our wine and then I ordered us a cheesecake. I considered proposing over dessert but she has never been a huge fan of public affairs. After dinner I took her on a walk near the restaurant. Out of sheer luck I found this gorgeous fountain so I asked her there on the spot.
Biff: That sounds great dad! Congratulations!
Willy: Thank you son. Are you ready to meet her?
Biff: Yeah that would be great.
Willy: She’s on the back porch.
(Biff set his suitcase near the door and he and Willy make their way down stage left. The spotlight shines on them and Angela.)
Willy: Angela I would like you to meet my eldest son Biff.
Angela: It’s great to meet you Biff.
Biff: You too Angela. Congratulations on the engagement. Dad  just got done telling me the story.
Angela: Thank you very much. It was very unexpected but such a great surprise.
Willy: How about some wine to celebrate?
(Willy exits towards stage top stage right. The light fades off him and continues shining on Angela and Biff.)
Angela: So Biff, I hear that you are going to school to be a lawyer. Is that right?
Biff: Yes ma’am that is correct. I will be graduating next year.
Angela: Are you enjoying school?
Biff: Yes I am. My football season just ended so my life won’t be as hectic but I will enjoy the peace.
Angela: What position did you play?
Biff: I played offense. It was my first year of playing but I had a lot of fun. If I play next year you and dad should come to one of my games. We get a pretty good turnout.
Angela: That would be a lot of fun. I’m always telling Willy we need to get out of Belmont.
(Willy returns down stage right with wine in hand)
Willy: I would like to make a toast. It’s not very often that I get to see my son but to have both my son and my fiancĂ© in the room is a rare delicacy. Cheers to an amazing life ahead.
Angela: Cheers.
Biff: Cheers.

Response to Article


Texting May Lead to Bad Grammar
Megan Gannon, News Editor
Date:26 July 2012 Time 5:20 PM ET
Texting could lead to a decline in language skills, warns a new study that found tweens who text are more likely to fall short on grammar tests.
Many tweens take shortcuts or use so-called techspeak when sending text messages. “They may use a homophone, such as gr8 for great, or an initial, like, LOL for laugh out loud,” Northwestern researcher Drew Cingel explained in a statement. Other shortcuts include dropping non-essential letters, such as changing the word “would” to “wud.”
To study the effect of these habits, Cingel gave a group of middle school studentshttp://images.intellitxt.com/ast/adTypes/icon1.png in central Pennsylvania a grammar assessment test. The students were then given a survey that asked them to detail how many texts they send and receive, their opinions on the importance of texting and the number of shortcuts in their last three sent and received text messages.
The results of the survey and the test, which were reported in the journal New Media & Society, showed a link between poor grammar scores and frequent texting. What’s more, both sending and receiving techspeak-riddled texts seemed to affect how poorly the students performed on the test. This suggests tweens might not be initiating all of their bad language habits, but might also be influenced by the grammatically incorrect messages sent by their friends and family.
“In other words, if you send your kid a lot of texts with word adaptations, then he or she will probably imitate it,” said S. Shyam Sundar, a Penn State communications professor who worked with Cingel. “These adaptations could affect their offline language skills that are important to language development and grammar skills, as well.”
In addition to a natural desire to imitate friends and family, the researchers speculated that some texting tweens made poor grammar choices in more formal writing because they had trouble switching between techspeak and the normal rules of grammar.





My Response:
 The results of the experiment suggested that texting leads to poor grammar in the teenage demographic. The article focuses on the concept of techspeak otherwise known as texting lingo. It is suggests that if children and teens use techspeak, their grammar will be poor. I myself use social media daily and can aid in the idea that poor grammar is used in texting, tweeting, and facebooking. I did not agree with the article suggesting that parents should watch what they send their children via text message. A parent plays a huge role in molding a child’s grammar; however, children do not learn grammar specifically through text messaging. Social media plays a very important role in today’s society. Children are exposed to incorrect grammar constantly.
Teenagers need to understand the difference between professional versus casual speech. Techspeak is acceptable for social media but is not for formal writing. The separation between the two different written lingos needs to be separated. In today’s society, techspeak has become an accepted norm; however, some people forget to switch from techspeak to professional. Teenagers need to be aware that there is a difference in the way they should write in a formal essay versus how they should text. Today, the issue of poor grammar does not get enough attention because social media is prevalent. Schools need to address the issue of professional versus casual speech in the classroom in hopes that one day grammar will become more important. 

Essay Two

Why People Should Read for Pleasure
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In the past years the use of the television and the internet has increased; this situation has caused many people to change their likes and the way that they enjoy their free time.  Because of television and the internet, many people spend less time reading, so the purpose for this essay is to present reasons why people should read just for pleasure.  The reasons that I give you are quite simple: to improve your knowledge, to expand your general culture, to have more fun, to make your imagination fly, to find new ways to express your ideas, and finally to expand your vocabulary.
The first reason that I give you to enjoy reading is that when you read, you can expand your knowledge and also your culture. There are a lot of good books in which you can find history, novels, tragedies, comedies and a variety of other themes. You can see that people who read more often frequently have a bigger knowledge of life and also a bigger perspective of their environment.  I think that fact gives them an advantage over all others who do not read frequently.
The second reason to read more often is that through books you can have fun and even travel in your imagination.  Children have not yet lost the ability of getting  into their dreams, and because of this, in their first years the parents read a lot of tales  in which they use their imagination. Adults should try to keep this ability, so we do not forget the importance of the use of the imagination. The imagination also represents a tool that could help you to develop your professional career in a creative way.
Finally, the third and the most important feature that reading offers you is that it does not matter the age that you have, you always could expand your vocabulary and the ways to express your ideas to the others in a simple and correct form. By the time you can improve the kind of books that you read, there are a lot of categories, so you will never stop learning from the pleasure of reading. People who know how to choose a book generally have the capability of choosing a formal book in which they can find formal grammatical structures and obviously a formal vocabulary.  All these things allow them to gain greater fluency in their communication.
In conclusion, I recommend that you enjoy reading more often. There are excellent reasons for doing it;  you just have to want to expand your knowledge and your culture, to improve your imagination and also your vocabulary. I know that we should evolve with the technology; that is, it is good to know how to navigate in the internet, but we must also not forget the books. Try to choose good books at the beginning, and then I ensure you that you never will stop reading.




Paragraph Structure: 4
            Based off the first paragraph, I would think that the paper has to do with television and internet as opposed to reading. Each paragraph was structured and stayed focused with its theme. I would suggest better transitions from paragraph to paragraph.


Unity: 4
            Altogether, the paper flowed well. The ideas within the paragraph are cohesive with one another, although, the writer could have use stronger claims.

Coherence: 3
            Logical Bridge- The sentences within the paragraph connected with the theme. There were no random thoughts floating around in the essay.
            Verbal Bridge- The author should try to avoid the repetition of words. The writer should work on using stronger transitions within the paper.

Supporting Details: 3
            The writer did not have any sources within the paper. They made general claims without backing up their statements. It seems like the writer used their own opinion instead of gathering information from other resources.

Grammar: 2
            The essay lacked in vocabulary. They could have used stronger words within the essay to make it more formal. The author should have avoided the repletion of certain words and phrases. There were some random semicolons and commas throughout the paper that were misplaced.

GRADE: 16/25- 64%- D

Essay One



Why People Shouldn't Watch Too Much Television
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Watching television is an experience shared by most adults and children. It is cheap, appealing, and within the reach of the general public. In this way, TV has become an important mass media around the world. Sadly, this resource isn’t used in a way that people could get the best possible benefits from it. The purpose of this essay is to persuade the reader that people shouldn’t watch too much television because the content of many TV programs is not educational; it makes people waste time that could be used in more beneficial activities; and it negatively affects people’s mental development.
The first reason why people shouldn’t watch too much television is because the content of many TV programs is not educational. Nowadays, we can see movies, series, and shows that present scenes of violence, sex, and drugs. This has established wrong concepts among the audience that influence them into having a negative behavior. Moreover, the impact this tendency has on children is worse because they grow up with the idea of a world where women must be slender and blonde to stand out, where problems can only be solved with money and violence, and where wars are inevitable.
The second reason why people shouldn’t watch too much television is because it makes people waste time that could be used in more beneficial activities. The time we spend watching TV could be applied to useful activities like exercise, reading, interacting with friends and family, activities that are a crucial for a healthy lifestyle.
The third reason why people shouldn’t watch too much television is because it negatively affects people’s mental development. According to several scientific studies, watching TV for prolonged periods of time has a negative effect over the intellectual development of children and leads to deterioration of the mental capacity in older people by causing both attention and memory problems in the long term.
In conclusion, people shouldn’t watch too much television because the content of many TV programs is not educational; it makes people waste time that could be used in more beneficial activities; and it affects people’s mental development. However, this doesn’t mean that we should ban TV, but if we are going to watch it, we should do it with moderation. Television is a resource that we should learn to use through the right selection of programs by taking an active and critical attitude towards it.




Grade:
Paragraph Structure: 4
            Overall the writer was consistent with their ideas. I would suggest better transition sentences. The writer needs to tie their ideas together more coherently.
Unity: 5
            The paper flow well. The writer focuses on his major theme throughout the essay. Their facts related to the theme of the paper.
Coherence: 3
            Logical Bridge-The writer transitioned his sentences well but could have been more distinct and could have used stronger transitions.
            -Verbal Bridge: The writer repeats words a lot. Could have used more colorful word choice.
Supporting Details: 4
            The writer backed up their details after making statements. They did not have any sources but the essay did not require any.
Grammar: 3
            The writing was conversational. The writer lacked description. They should avoid vague words such as “it” and “this.” Contractions should have been avoided and the writer should have spelt out the word television instead of using its initials. 

GRADE: 19/25-76 -C

Imitation of Red Wheelbarrow


The Red Wheelbarrow
So much depends
Upon
A red wheel
Barrow
Glazed with rain
Water
Beside the white
Chickens.

Hamill:
So much depends
Upon
A purple
Bicycle
Covered in white
Snow
Beside the blue
Shed.
Work Cited:
Williams, William C. "Letters from Archibald MacLeish." Poetry Foundation. N.p., 1938. Web. 25 Apr. 2013.

Imitation of A Series of Unfortunate Events



“It is useless for me to describe to you how terrible Violet, Klaus, and even Sunny felt in the time that followed. If you have ever lost someone very important to you, then you already know how it feels, and if you haven't, you cannot possibly imagine it.” 

Hamill:
The birth of your new brother has bought happiness to the entire family. After years of trying to conceive again we were finally blessed with James. He is our miracle child. The very idea of him living on this earth brings a smile on my face.

Van Gogh:
Violet wept over the death of her parents. She recalled how her mother had tucked her into bed the night before. She could still feel her father’s lips stamped onto her forehead. As she surveyed the rubbles of the burnt ply wood, she tried to envision what her house use to look like. The image was too grotesque which sent her running in the opposite direction.